I am modifying a previous outbound email letter by inserting the
colored sentence below which replaces a former sentence. I find this replacement great but since I am not an English native speaker, I would like to know your opinion about it and what changes should I make if this is not proper English. I am particularly in doubt if the expression "top administrators" is adequate in this context. However, any suggestions for improving also other parts of this letter model will be appreciated. If the text is already perfect, please let me know as well.
Hello,
I am John Taylor, owner of the domain name: SomeDomain.com.
I am contacting you and also the top administrators of other companies for which this domain name is highly valuable and can make a big impact on their business or activities.
Should your organization have an interest in acquiring this domain, please feel free to contact me.
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You can contact me through:
Email: [email protected]
or
Tel: 00-00000000
My best regards,
John